Was decent until the last statement "A great way to put your money where your mouth is." I wouldn't ever use something like it.

The pitch contains the most important elements of an elevator pitch. (You could try to speak the whole pitch without having to cut the video, imagine that you are really presenting an elevator pitch, you wouldn't have the chance to do it!) I wonder if you have tried to create gadget or widgets in Facebook to promote your tool. I guess it would be a good way to promote your product.